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Looks good, but I would cut out this line:"While one of the criticisms of early generations of My Little Pony was “flat” characters and a “fluid” cannon"No one aside from bronies and serious pony collectors know about or care about criticisms of early gens of ponies, let alone what G1 canon was. To most people there is not really any difference between G1, G4, or any other gen. (Also lore is canon rather than cannon. )Overall, great job! You really managed to capture the brand in a very small amount of space.
There's a bunch of stuff that needs to be confirmed (Was Europe the last market for G1 in 1995? I'm not sure.)
I love the 2nd draft! You're doing a really great job.I will say that the colorful ponies meant more to me than replacing owning a real pony. For me, the back cards and the cartoons portrayed them as talking magical beings living in a beautiful and exciting world and that's what gave them the appeal over more realistic horses. I wouldn't have imagined myself "owning" one of the characters. I would have considered them friends. But I don't know if that was the general view.
I think you’re doing a great job. Editing and rewriting is hard work. I keep reading this part of one of tgs segencrs and it sounds weird to me. “each with a unique painted design on either flank” Would “each flank” sound better than “either flank?” Ponyfan