I think everyone slips into passive voice sometimes. I can't say much about stopping it, but I will say that I often do two things as I edit. I 'find' function -ing- and look at my ing vebs. Also, I use a few of the free editing pages that will help to show passive voice. (http://editminion.com) (prowritingaid.com)

Thank you ringwraith10. It's supposed to be cheerful zombie stories so there is a lot of comedic takes/happy endings/ oddly upbeat themes.

My own story is about a girl in a wheelchair who tries to use necromancy to reanimate her legs. Things don't go exactly as planed, but the ending is still decently upbeat.


On a separate note, I don't know if there are any Furries here on the Arena but I also contributed to the Roar Volume 6 anthology by FurPanet Productions. It's an anthology centered on the theme of scoundrels and the characters are all anthropomorphic animals.  It was the first time i ever tried to write Furry fiction. It took lots of research, but I think it came out well also. That one isn't available yet. It's up for preorder but it won't actually be released until the very end of July.

http://furplanet.com/shop/item.aspx?itemid=788

I'll try to organize a giveaway (if that sort of thing is allowed) once I have them in stock.

Thanks! I know it's just a small press, but I got paid for something I wrote so I count that as a step in the right direction.

I liked it Congrats!

Sure I will try to get  few shots this morning at work! Check back with me around 4-5 tonight and I should have more information. Also I work at tuesday morning, so if you have one near you... they may have them also.

We have these bugs in clear plastic at my work, they are like paperweights. I think they are gross, but several people have told me they are a great deal. Does anyone collect them? I could pick a few up for you, I think they are like $2.

*shiver*

I bought a plush (pokemon) from china and it was very cheap. When it arrived one of the seams was popped so I shot them a quick message like- hey it was ripped, but it's still a good deal so I don't want anything from you, I am just letting you know so that you can check the others in the batch. They responded that they were sorry and if I sent pictures they'd send another one.  I replied no thanks I will just sew it, I wanted to let you know so you could talk to your quality control people and let them know. Then, they offered me a partial refund.  At that point, I tried just sending no thank you, I'm happy. They offered a partial refund or replacement item again. I've already given positive feedback, and I really don't want anything from them.

Any advice on how to make them understand, or should I just stop responding and hope for the best?