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Offline RaphLuna

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Thank You everyone for your kind words and wonderful advice..

To Express my Gratitude to all you hard work, kindness of inspiration

I present to you the wonderful people of the Mlp Arena and Pony Lovers everywhere the one the only Laurie Doodles  origional  one of a kind, unique in all ways very well planned and thought out story, you never herd of...

GET TO THE POINT.....!!!

Bowing down gracefully. Please forgive the lousy spelling and grammar  and stuff...

I understand having content connected  within Hasbro will limit my options. However, if i ditch their stuff, and make up all my own... The sky will be my limit to explore.. And open my options to other entertainment industries who just might want to take The story further..

Sorry but you are not allowed to view spoiler contents.

I also plan  to join  Oatley Academy

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Hopefully they can help me into making Crystal Frost Story a reality to read and or view on the big screen...

yes I have that much faith in my story..

[edited to add spoiler tag. In the future please put very long posts behind this tag. Moving to A&C. Thanks! Df]
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Re: Totally Freaking Out Right Now...
« Reply #1 on: March 12, 2018, 03:57:47 PM »
Don't listen to your spouse, writing about something you love is not a waste of time!  I think it's great that you're using your creativity and imagination to produce something brand new.  :)

As far as your writing and grammar being 'weak', practice makes perfect.  :)  The more you write, the stronger your writing will become.  (Also if you grab any random novel, you can 'study' it and kind of imitate the formatting.)

Your pony-dragon character is adorable, BTW.

I don't want to crush your dreams of Hasbro licensing your story, but that is probably not going to happen; it's just not something they do.  HOWEVER . . . if you file off the aspects that make your story specifically "My Little Pony" (i.e. remove all references to Equestria, Hasbro's characters, Ponyville, cutie marks and other official terms) then there's a chance you could publish your story.  I'm fairly sure that's been done before for the children's market.

The nice thing about that would be that you could also use your creativity in imagining the world your ponies live in too, and wouldn't have to be like "Oh, I can't do this or that because the show contradicts it."
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Re: Totally Freaking Out Right Now...
« Reply #2 on: March 12, 2018, 04:53:00 PM »
I understand having content connected  within Hasbro will limit my options. However, if i ditch their stuff, and make up all my own.

My options will be limitless, Idea Thank you so much. Hugs..

I can easily ditch the cutie marks and call them birth marks that the ponies are born with.. And ditch the characters names that Hasbro used, getting more creative and making up my own.  give them new countries too.. That is easy. To do, and it will open my option to get other big movie and TV and publisher makers on board,

I'm making up most of my characters on their own.   

However, what will really make this work is finishing the books and make my next move.

Once I'm done with the completed book I will join Oatley Acedemy  with their guidance and advice, direction and influence will, work to make the Story of Crystal Frost come to life.. 

do you know the beauty part about all this is the core story line is complete..

No need to study novels. Because the spine is complete..
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Hugs  You are AWESOME..
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Re: Totally Freaking Out Right Now...
« Reply #3 on: March 12, 2018, 05:23:21 PM »
Be carrefull, you said you can just "copy" and "rename/rework" a content made by Hasbro, but it's NOT that simple. It would still looks like copy, and the work will enter in conflict with copyright and licence. There's strict LAW about all thoses stuffs, I've studiyed them and I can let you know, you'd better have your whole universe created by you & only you. Big companies always wins. Also, be carefull with your graphics lines as well.

One one the only things you can use to commercialise and publish licencied content is parody. There's tribute also.
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Re: Totally Freaking Out Right Now...
« Reply #4 on: March 12, 2018, 05:44:08 PM »
Be carrefull, you said you can just "copy" and "rename/rework" a content made by Hasbro, but it's NOT that simple. It would still looks like copy, and the work will enter in conflict with copyright and licence. There's strict LAW about all thoses stuffs, I've studiyed them and I can let you know, you'd better have your whole universe created by you & only you. Big companies always wins. Also, be carefull with your graphics lines as well.

One one the only things you can use to commercialise and publish licencied content is parody. There's tribute also.

I think avoiding duplicate names is the most important thing.  And, yeah, not having it super obvious like "We ponies live in Horseville below the Canterdot Castle in Equestrialle", lol.  But if it's "These ponies live in the town of Meadowbrook on Mount Stormhoof, far from the capitol of Silkenmane which overlooks the great green grazing grounds" or whatever then I think that would be sufficiently different that Hasbro wouldn't / couldn't do anything.

I remember reading a series about unicorns who live on the other side of the rainbow (Unicorns of Balinor), and I would be really surprised if it wasn't inspired by MLP.  Rainbow colored talking unicorns who lived over a rainbow . . . They didn't have symbols / cutie marks, but IIRC they did have "mystical crystals" I think.

Anyway, getting back on topic, I looked up Oatley Academy and found some good reviews for it that said it had a great community / support.  So I think that's a great choice!
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Re: Totally Freaking Out Right Now...
« Reply #5 on: March 12, 2018, 05:44:32 PM »
Don't listen to your spouse, writing about something you love is not a waste of time!  I think it's great that you're using your creativity and imagination to produce something brand new.  :)

As far as your writing and grammar being 'weak', practice makes perfect.  :)  The more you write, the stronger your writing will become.  (Also if you grab any random novel, you can 'study' it and kind of imitate the formatting.)

Your pony-dragon character is adorable, BTW.

I don't want to crush your dreams of Hasbro licensing your story, but that is probably not going to happen; it's just not something they do.  HOWEVER . . . if you file off the aspects that make your story specifically "My Little Pony" (i.e. remove all references to Equestria, Hasbro's characters, Ponyville, cutie marks and other official terms) then there's a chance you could publish your story.  I'm fairly sure that's been done before for the children's market.

The nice thing about that would be that you could also use your creativity in imagining the world your ponies live in too, and wouldn't have to be like "Oh, I can't do this or that because the show contradicts it."

I will Call it the Wild Lands don't want Disney getting mad at me for calling it the outland's

Tree Top Hills is a small lumber village, don't think Hasbro came up with that one..

Lake Camp Cloud is a small filliy and foal Camp site near a lake shaped like a cloud.

I can call the Dragon home,  Flame mountain an island with a large volcano into the middle of it surrounded by small islands where dragons claim their territory. Some times battles occur fighting for the best islands to nest and make their homes..
After all Dragons main Food source is Fish..

And the birth mark idea is great, ponies can be born with a birth mark anywhere on their body., some can even be born without one.. And be made fun of because of them being birthmark less.. While Star Shine being the rare occasion of being born with 3 birth marks on each side of her side oh rump and one on her cheek  Where the class mates are Jealous.. And make fun of her.

The Festival of lights and the harvest of fun. Being a special event for ponies all across the lands..

The queen of this world is a beautiful Alicorn with fancy birth marks that decorate all over her body..

Maybe create a New Villain, Jealous of the ponies birthmarks, he  steals the birthmarks of the ponies and places them his special Scrapbook..

We can even a a Birth Mark day of celebration... Where they have dancing, games and Prizes.Contest and fun..

You just Flooded me with more Wild Ideas Hugs..

Thank You ... You are AWESOME..

HUGS..
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Re: Totally Freaking Out Right Now...
« Reply #6 on: March 12, 2018, 05:49:23 PM »
Isn't it great when you start getting that flood of ideas??  The festival of lights and Tree Top Hills sound great.  :)

I would say write first and worry about "Hasbro stuff" later.  You can always change stuff once you start editing.  Where a lot of people get stuck is they get stuck in "edit mode" and stop writing.  (I know I am guilty of this, ha ha.)  Editing is very important of course, but if someone doesn't finish writing the first draft (messy and error-riddled as it may be) then there's nothing to edit.
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Re: Totally Freaking Out Right Now...
« Reply #7 on: March 12, 2018, 05:50:50 PM »
Definitely second the keep writing advice. Never ever give up on your dream. It's only by working at it that you get anywhere.

I think just keep what LBS said in mind, make sure you're a long way from the MLP concept when you take this further because it will protect you. Hasbro are a big impersonal corporation and you don't want to tick them off unduly because it won't end well. But you have the imagination to make something completely separate from MLP, and also the ability to illustrate it. So as you said, your options are limitless. I would be careful with the birthmark/bullying for lack of birthmark thing. That's very like CMC. BUT the idea of a villain stealing birthmarks and putting them in a scrapbook, that sounds different. Mind you, I'm not sure you need birthmarks. You have a dragon horse. That opens completely different options to MLP.

I think the secret to doing that is to focus on the species in your illustration.

What LM means about reading novels and such is just that actually, doing that can help your creative processes and any weaknesses you have in grammar. By reading, you kind of absorb the way sentences go together and then you will find it easier to fix those issues when you come up against them in your own writing.

I write a lot, when I'm not banging my head against my PhD and class preparation stuff, but I write both original stuff and fanfic. The fanfic I write is often posted out there for feedback and constructive critique. This isn't that kind of story, as you want it to be original rather than MLP fanfic to get it published or developed...so maybe that's not an option for you. But if you wanted to improve your writing, writing actual mlp fanfiction and posting it online may be a way for you to do that. It's also a good way to try out ideas (and maybe torture people with cliffhangers, which is what I do because I'm just mean).

Good luck :)
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Re: Totally Freaking Out Right Now...
« Reply #8 on: March 12, 2018, 06:07:53 PM »
What LM means about reading novels and such is just that actually, doing that can help your creative processes and any weaknesses you have in grammar. By reading, you kind of absorb the way sentences go together and then you will find it easier to fix those issues when you come up against them in your own writing.

Exactly . . . The more you read, the more you subconsciously know "this is how this sentence should look" without having to stop and think about it.  Although, even with a lot of reading, this is easier for some people than others . . . I absorbed grammar rules easily through reading, but my sister has dyslexia and struggled . . . Still, I do think it helps most people. :)

About the birthmarks, another possibility is them showing up on the ponies' chests or even on the underside of their hooves.  In which case the main character could try to hide her lack by hiding her hooves / wearing shoes until finally her 'terrible' secret was revealed.

Or, the ponies could have charms they wear instead of a mark on their body.  Like, "On their 18th birthday ponies venture deep into the forest to forge the talisman that will reveal their True Name" or something like that.  (And if you wanted an element of surprise to what the symbol would end up being, you could have the ponies drink a potion that sends them into a trance while they work, or even just have them cast the metal into a volcano(?) and then the volcano melts the metal into a symbol.  In the main character's case maybe the volcano doesn't return the metal at all?  But later it turns out there is an Important Reason for that.

Just some ideas, feel free to use, ignore, or change them.  :)
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Re: Totally Freaking Out Right Now...
« Reply #9 on: March 12, 2018, 06:51:12 PM »
It's cool to know there are other aspiring writers out there.  :lol: :lol:  I write short stories (not about ponies) and have had some success in contests, but none in publications. 

My personal advice: write for yourself.  If you focus too much on what other people think, or of an end goal like publication, writing becomes tedious very quickly.  Write what you want to write.  Write what makes you happy.   ^.^ ^.^

Neat start to your story though.  I like the cliffhanger ending!

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Re: Totally Freaking Out Right Now...
« Reply #10 on: March 12, 2018, 09:47:17 PM »
Moved the story to the to, that Way it is easier to find it.

Post Merge: March 13, 2018, 01:35:23 PM

Be carrefull, you said you can just "copy" and "rename/rework" a content made by Hasbro, but it's NOT that simple. It would still looks like copy, and the work will enter in conflict with copyright and licence. There's strict LAW about all thoses stuffs, I've studiyed them and I can let you know, you'd better have your whole universe created by you & only you. Big companies always wins. Also, be carefull with your graphics lines as well.

One one the only things you can use to commercialise and publish licencied content is parody. There's tribute also.

I was on a creative journey last night and Wow I'm loving
The results.. Here is what I woke up to in my head  I broke the chains of Hasbro..
 and went on my own epic journey...

 seeing my daughter create Pokémon fusions , go me brain storming for a world of Pony Fusions..

The camel prince should be a camel pony prince a pony fused with a camel

And a new world sparked up The deer ponies  deer fused with ponies..they are guardians of the magical forest teaming with wildlife.. The Fox ponies that are crafty sly creatures who like to steal from the ponies and fusion ponies all across the lands..

The sea dolphin ponied, that help ponies lost at sea find their way back to land

The Turtle ponies the live in the ocean and walk on land..

the shark ponies who are jealous of how the earth ponies love the dolphin ponies, and fear the shark ponies of the sea...

How about the Gorilla Ponies that live in the jungle  And the Parrot Ponies that think they are better that the Gorilla Ponies, because their beautiful colors and that the birth mark is more colorful than their plain one...

And the Frog ponies that live in the swamp. And the spider ponies, , whom are feared because they look too creepy..

The polar ponied that live with the ice ponies, and the snow rabbit ponies... Who are smaller ponies in size yet they are just as important too..

like wow... The possibilities are endless...

We create fusion ponies with the creatures of the real world

that way it helps us connect with the reality that even though we are the main species on land, that has the most influence of the impact on the planet there are other creatures that exist that are equally as important as us..

I link this is a very unique way to connect  the viewers with life on the planet too..

All creatures in my world will be born with birth marks no matter they be a polar pony, turtle pony or a spider pony,, there will be a random few born with no birth marks ..

However the message is do not feel ashamed  because you have a birth mark and others do not. or less value just because you were not born with a birth mark like the rest... We are all different in our on unique way when we are born, and we should celebrate together birthmark or no birthmark.. being proud just the way we are.

I love it the more it think the creative I become... Good bye Chains of Hasbro... Hello Freedom...

I'm not going to be a sheep and follow the rest of the crowd , yet when I tried to put crystal Frost into Hasbro world.. That is exactly what I was doing...

Now that I realize this, I broke the chain decided to create a new world called the pony fusions..  yes there is still unicorns, Pegasus, earth ponies, dragons,  even Alicors . However i decided to walk the path that never had been done before. Fusing pones with the creatures I love around the world..

Yes I just wrote these ideas today, my world is going beyond Hasbro Idea..

It is a new world all its very own..

I went from an idea to a puddle to a water fall an ocean, and now one massive Explosion..

And I love it...

Here is the song I written just last night to go with the story..

Here is my song just created for my story line on working on. Hope you enjoy,..

Our world is shattered,
In pieces it is true,
 
We do not see eye to eye,
We all stick,
in our own view.

True we are all different,
We do not look the same

Yet we all on one world
It's time we share the plan..

So listen to me,
why fight when we are one.

So much has happened,
to the lands and to the Sun.

We need to unite together,
to protect our families.

Yes its true
our lives are all different ,
We must stand with what we know.


But there is a better way
If you come and follow me

Let's unite together
And set our spirit free.

So let's joint together
In hoof's and in our hand

We must work together
To help protect our lands .

So much has happened,
Lest stand as one
standing tall

To unite together

and

protect

our

world

Ever Shine and Free

I Love this Poem and it works well to become a beautiful song.. Yes I just wrote this song last night it been nagging me to wake up... And get my message out..

This will become a reality you will see, its like mixing fantasy into reality....

Hugs Friends.

Laurie Doodles

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