It's nice to see you uploading again!
The only real advice I have is to perhaps eliminate the black between takes, if possible. I would just cut straight to or fade into the next take, leaving yourself a beat when you're shooting.
Your voice was still audible over the music track, which is very important. I've seen many people who forget to adjust the volume of the background music. Good job on that! Your choice of music was very nice, too.
You have a great voice for videos because you speak clearly and don't stumble over words a lot.
A good video all in all!