COMPLETE! Little Ponies Lost (A G1 Pony Fan Novel)

[archidraca]

Still simply wonderful.

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If there was anything at the beginning of the chapter I didn't notice it as I was immediately sucked back into the story

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Then I would screw up, and ponies wouldn’t be mad at me.”

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“I’ve just been on me [my] wings all day, and it’s caught up with me.”

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“Then on, there’s a place right under us that’s perfect.”   ------>   "Then let's go! There's a place right under us that's perfect."

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Fortunately, on others had gotten use or broken despite the entire day on the wing.  ----->   Fortunately, no feathers had become broken despite the entire day on the wing.

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“How does it fell [feel] now?”

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However, in the empty places, I can find peace
and find things must [most] ponies never notice.”

*happily waiting for more*

[Al-1701]

Edits made.  Thanks.

[Leave a Whisper]

I've started reading some of the comics to better understand. I now know why your Twilight spread mist around.

I'm not entirely sure what to make of the comics.

[Al-1701]

It's also why extended her name to Twilight Mist because of the fact there is a another Twilight within the Year 1-5 (plus Nightglider and Blueberry Baskets) range I'm looking to draw ponies from.  If I ever use the pegasus Twilight, her name is Twilight Hope.

Interesting you bring up the comics because a character from the comics will be introduced in Chapter 6.

For now, Chapter 5 ready.  This one came real fast even though it ended up being rather long.

[Al-1701]

Chapter 6 is up, and a character from the comic is making one of a few appearances in this story.

[Leave a Whisper]

Chapter 6?! I don't recall getting a notification for chapter 5. *runs to check*

Post Merge: August 05, 2016, 11:05:39 AM

How strange. It says on my watch and favorite list that it hasn't been updated since chapter 4. I wonder if ff.net is having problems?

[Al-1701]

I guess it buried the announcement to well in a post.  Yes, Chapters 5 and 6 are available on the google doc linked here.

I decided to drop the "everypony" thing and give an explanation as to why.

EDIT:  Chapter 5 and 6 are now on ff.net.

And, please, tell your friends about this story if you're liking it.

[Al-1701]

I just keep rolling the chapters out.  We're to Chapter 7 already out of a planned 15 already.

Now, I supposed many of you reading have wondered why a pony clearly fitting the description of Majesty has been called Blueflower.  Well, this latest chapter deals with that.

[ZennaBug]

It looks good to begin with!  I will hopefully have a chance soon to sit down and catch up with the rest. 

[Al-1701]

Thanks.  I hope everyone is liking this.  I have been taking a bit of a break to give people a chance to provide their feedback.  Chapter 8 is going begin a shift in tone as the fight against the harpies is going to become active.

[Al-1701]

And Chapter 8 is up.  A bit of a rise in the tension.

[Leave a Whisper]

And Chapter 8 is up.  A bit of a rise in the tension.

You sure do know how to make us feel it. I was holding my breath during the part where they took aim.

Also, nice nod to Dressed Like A Dream. That's one of my favorite songs.

[Al-1701]

Chapter 9 is now up.  Things are ramping up as we head into a big confrontation.

[Al-1701]

Chapter 10 is now posted.  The ponies are going on the offensive with a big battle.  Will they triumph?

[Al-1701]

I was looking at at heckyaponyscans, and how a reblog of someone describing a dream of a pony story.  It was of a group of ponies finding a long abandoned Dream Castle and searching its secret rooms.  Hm.

Anyway, Chapter 11 is up.  The secret of the Valkyrie Queens is revealed, and Wind Whistler has a plan.

I'm shocked I'm getting this close to the end.  I planned for this to have 15 chapters, so only four more to go.  Please, leave some feedback.  What do you like, not like, and any issue with grammar you pick up on.